Survivor Challenge #1 Quest for Fire

[eeyore_grrl]

			fire is life

so so very very cold
here i walk foot after foot
drenched in the snow
freezing with each step
	          each breath

i thought i knew cold
	til i walked uphill in 3 feet of unplowed brilliance
searching for a shortcut
		and finding none

i search for warmth
			heat
				fire
	in the beating of my heart
	in my feet as they seek
	in my every-
                               thing
		even my thoughts have slowed like molasses in the cold
			turning to slush with one thing on my mind

fire


	fire to warm my heart
			bringing it back from the brink of emptiness
			finding hope in the fire inside
			finding hope and heat
		i thaw from the outside in
			my heart losing walls i formed of ice & anger

				   losing walls
						i formed
							  of ice & anger


but here i am trekking up the hill
	walking like my life depended on this quest
	this quest to find my home
		     to find fire
				to thaw me, to honor my hearth
					Bowing to Hestia
					thanking Prometheus
			fire is life

fire 
is
life

https://youtu.be/epmyj1Y4UoU


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Comments

[bleodswean]

Utterly fantastic how you reveal the status of your heart. Just fantastic work here!

[eeyore_grrl]

Thank you so much for the compliments. It means a lot.
(particularly from the other "tribe.)

it's not quite true anymore, but i've been ice cold before.

[bleodswean]

Eeee - let's hope this season isn't THAT competitive!

[eeyore_grrl]

Agreed. :-)

[bsgsix]

First - ASAGA!!

Secondly - this is wonderful, and raw, and it speaks to such a personal place inside of yourself. I also like the honoring of Hestia and Prometheus. That was a perfect touch.

As a person who has surrounded herself in ice forever, who has kept up walls, and who is trying to let them thaw - this hits home. Your poem is fantastic. <3

[eeyore_grrl]

ASAGA!!! Wooo. :-D

Thank you for your compliments. I was having a really hard time with this poem. I'm so out of practice writing. Hopefully, I will stay in the game for awhile. :-)

[lawchicky819]

I felt cold reading this! That seems like a good thing.

[eeyore_grrl]

Something is working; Thank you.

[adoptedwriter]

Bravo!!!

[eeyore_grrl]

Thanks. :-)

[uselesstinrelic]

I always have to excuse myself when I comment on entries that are poetry because I don't consider myself very hip in that way. That said, I do usually have to read them a few times. As I did, I started to get an understanding for another layer. I don't know if how I'll interpret it is what you intended, but it was a good ride.

[eeyore_grrl]

No need to excuse yourself. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks.

[uselesstinrelic]

Woo! : >

[gunwithoutmusic]

Asaga! Woo!

I really liked this. I loved your performance of it; I can really feel your heart in it there. This is one that, like most poetry, really benefits from repeated readings. Each time I went through it, I found something I had missed before.

I know all too well that feeling of searching for that fire inside, to thaw out those walls that you've spent so much time building up, thinking you're creating comfort but really just creating isolation. And when they're so strong, those walls can't be melted by anything from the outside; they need that fire inside first. I hope you find that fire.

[eeyore_grrl]

This poem isn't complete fiction or truth. Either way, my heart is no longer encased in ice. In truth, sometimes throughout life, I wished that I was icier.

Thank you for all the compliments.

[megatronix]

Oooh, lovely. I especially like the "fire to warm my heart" stanza. "walls I formed of ice and anger" is very interesting. I also like the inclusion of Hestia and Prometheus. This has a powerful feel to it.

[eeyore_grrl]

thank you so much. I had a really hard time starting this poem and figuring out where to go with it and how. but, clearly, i couldn't have a fire poem without prometheus. :-)

[murielle]

Yes! Yes it is!

So strong and deep!

Brava!

(Love your hair!)

[eeyore_grrl]

My metamour (partner's partner) cut it for me a few weeks ago (days ago, what is time?).

I miss a better color job, but it's good. Thank you!

[n3m3sis43]

This is so relatable! Also, we have the same hair color right now. <3

[eeyore_grrl]

Oh good, i'm glad it came off relatable. And yay same hair color!

[halfshellvenus]

I liked the phrase "3 feet of unplowed brilliance," but I especially loved

i thaw from the outside in
my heart losing walls i formed of ice & anger

Wonderful phrasing and wonderful feeling there!

[flipflop_diva]

I love this! Even the words read so musically. And I especially love that in this case, fire is a good thing!

[eeyore_grrl]

Awww, yay, thanks for the compliments.

[alycewilson]

I always enjoy listening to you reading your poems. It truly makes them come alive. I also enjoyed the Greek references near the end.

[eeyore_grrl]

Thank you. And i couldn't poet about fire and not bring in Prometheus.
:-)