Vital Organs (LJ Idol: Exhibit A Week 8)

[eeyore_grrl]

	  		Vital

today you said, “just sleep with me, mommy”
so i did

i laid with you until your breaths were steady
                             your lungs calm
                             your voice quiet
		             your heartbeat timed to sleep

i stayed with you while you drifted and relaxed towards slumber
i could feel the warmth of your skin, your cheek against my arm


once you were part of me
growing inside
pushing my organs to make room
stating that you were viable
                                         
                                   vital

and you are

because i cannot imagine life without your smile
			         life without your laugh
			              without the blue of your eyes

you grew from me and grow with me
your heart growing as you learn about the world
                                          love
			                  family
			                  friendship
					       (how to breathe
					        and stand strong)
how to use your lungs and your voice
                  your brain and heart

how to become 
              you

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This was written for week 8 of LJ Idol: Exhibit A. http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/632230.html
My topic was "Vital Organs."

You can see/hear the poem here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pXZ-0m5P5WQ&feature=youtu.be

Comments

[mac-arthur-park.livejournal.com]

That's really lovely.

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

Thank you. Tried to give up angst for a bit...

[theun4givables.livejournal.com]

I can most definitely relate to this. :) Well done.

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

Yay, relate-ability came across.

[audreybuttercup.livejournal.com]

This is very sweet, and so very true.

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

Conveniently, the kid is pretty sweet. :D

[abenn.livejournal.com]

Beautiful. What a profound and lovely statement on parenthood.

[labelleizzy.livejournal.com]

lovely.

[myrna-bird.livejournal.com]

How very true. Nice job.

[roina-arwen.livejournal.com]

I think this is my favorite of yours so far. :)

[halfshellvenus.livejournal.com]

you grew from me and grow with me
I especially liked this line, both the grew/grow but also because parents, we typically grow and change because of our children too. It goes both directions.

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

in re-write it may be "and I grow with you" because we/i totally do change and grow each day with him.

[beldarzfixon.livejournal.com]

So sweet, and the video totally kicks this up several notches.

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

Thanks. I think my writing stands on it's own, but there is POWER in a well-read poem that doesn't always come across in ink or written pixels.

[jem0000000.livejournal.com]

Aw, how sweet. :)

[zephyrly.livejournal.com]

That was beautiful.

[tatdatcm.livejournal.com]

A beautiful love poem for your child. I hope you save it for them to read later in life.

[xo-kizzy-xo.livejournal.com]

This, absolutely :nodding:

[dreamsreflected.livejournal.com]

Beautiful

[kandigurl.livejournal.com]

I was a little nervous to read this because of the topic, but you took something that could have been gruesome and gritty and made it beautiful. I love this!

[eeyore-grrl.livejournal.com]

glad to ease your nervousness. :D