LJ Idol 10 - Week 3 - Brushback Pitch

[eeyore_grrl]

(It's a contestant only vote this week, but you can read the other entries at http://therealljidol.livejournal.com/958277.html )

            brushback pitch


we should be better than this
i should be better than this
but tonight i don’t believe


should i put it in baseball terms?
	is that all-american enough?


right now the bases are loaded at the bottom of the 9th
with two strikes
the score is 5-4


i stand, bat up
	i stand, batter up
the throw is wild
	but controlled
	a brushback pitch, i’m told
		so close i can smell the leather
		so close my skin bears the marks of its stitching
	i jump
		trying for bodily safety


THREE STRIKES YOU’RE OUT
	
it’s as easy as that 
	i flinched 	
			game over

Comments

[murielle.livejournal.com]

Wow! This is so good. A metaphorical exact use of the prompt! Excellent! Let me try to word that better...an exact use of the prompt as a metaphor. Well done! Brava!